Score: 10

"Bleh at my voice acting...well done though."

submission: TBBAM Episode 1 - Part 1

date: August 13, 2008

Next time I would appreciate if I could watch the scenes so I could know how to speak in more natural and rhythmical way.

The beginning was like you said, a display of how you used to animate when you first got flash. Progressively your animating skills became way better. Although you say you wanted to keep the beginning scenes as they were made for the most part as a timeline, still think you just wanted to finish.

My biggest quarrel was the sniper scene...it was a kind of lacking in few ways....the block he was aiming at was not three dimensional like a block would be, and also the way he is shot in the head then gets up and says "fine I'll stop messing with Mike" was not a good line. It's not something that would be said because 1) how would he know getting shot was MIke's doing 2) If you survived getting sniped in the head, I don't think you would say that even if you were sure of who panned your killing.

The humor was good and I would be willing to voice acting for you again, I'm just pissed off at how amateurish I came off as.

Score: 6

"Too slow paced and unenjoyable."

submission: Hoops Mania

date: June 5, 2007

The game has nice graphics, but the gameplay is dull and has no replay-value. There is nothing added that makes the game interesting enough to play, and it would be a much better game if everything moved a bit faster, since there isn't too much time.

Overall, nice graphics, however, not interesting or fun.

Score: 4

"Add more detail in your animation."

submission: Bird on farm

date: February 24, 2007

This flash would look so much better if you added more detail. In other words, your drawings were too simplistic. Another thing is, there wasn't any point to it, nor anything to catch the viewers attention. For example, adding more colors to the sky. Honestly, it came off as you didn't put enough effort into the drawings and the movement of the bird was mediocre.

I think you should definitely continue flash because you have potential, but you should work on the way things move and perhaps add more colors and mesh them.

Score: 9

"Haha."

submission: P2Porn

date: September 8, 2006

Laughed at the bearshare porn bit.

The sound was a little distorted. At first it sounded like microsoft Sam.

I didn't know you were so good at animating now. LET ME MOOCH!

Hahaha.

Cheers,

Zach

Score: 6

"Talented animation but a huge failure in humor."

submission: Halo: Funny Situations

date: July 21, 2006

You're a talented animator. I really like what you did with the menu. The style of your animation was interesting too. The movement was good and the animation was realistic to the actual game.

The sound effects were good too. For speaking french your english isn't too bad. That was the least of the problem. The DU DU DET DU DUD. Got very annoying though.

You failed at your comedic timing and your script. The jokes were immature, which is usually funny but in this case for example in the peeing part. I can't say if I even smiled and I usual laugh a lot.

You should get someone to write for you because your a good animator. This flash as an art was above average but for a comedy it was horrible.

Score: 10

"Hilarious."

submission: TANKMEN

date: July 20, 2006

Wow Utah where to start....

The graphics were artistic looking even in black and white. I really liked how the guys goggles looked exactly like the NG logo. Maybe because you drew them :D . I liked how the colors blended in with each other too.

Actually to me the best part was your voice acting. I mean that was what made it so fucking funny. You have the other talent of changing your voice perfectly. I've never seen anything like it.

I also liked your animation style. It looked slick.

The humor was the best I've ever seen in a flash. It was a little random but not to overdone to the point where it's retarded. Made me laugh throughout the entire thing.

You have everything that makes a good flash. Hell I don't even care how the graphics are if it makes me laugh I'll give it a ten.

Oh yeah and if you want some help with the script I'll help you.

_ -Notorious-

Score: 8

"Great."

submission: Spitball

date: July 12, 2006

Wow I really liked this one.
You were funny this time.

The graphics were great too. This was your best work by far.
I liked the sound too. It tied together with what was going on.

In this case I don't think this flash would've looked as good with color since I guess it was supposed to look like doodles on looseleaf in class.

Was one of the people supposed be you in this?

_Notorious

Score: 4

"I'm not really sure what the hell I just saw."

submission: Pigskin Story

date: July 12, 2006

Okay, the file size was fine.

I'm not sure if you were trying to make a humor flash but if you did it wasn't that funny.

I really liked the style of the drawings in this flash espiecially, but you need color to make it a little more eye catching.

The problem with this was, I couldn't tell what was going on, it wasn't interesting, there wasn't any color, it was way too short, random in a bad way, and lacked effort.

A little advice is to color your flashes and when you do to make colors that mesh and are more eye grabbing.

You have good drawings and graphics but if you used a good color scheme you'd get a 9 or ten in graphics from me and other users.

_ Notorious

Score: 4

"Needs a lot of work."

submission: Music = Color

date: July 12, 2006

The graphics were as a basic as possible and extremely sketchy.

And the colors weren't meshed at all. You need to work on your color scheme.

I liked the idea of this which is why I gave it a 2/5 but the way it was done didn't have enough effort for anything close to a 3/5.

The movement and flow was really screwed up too.

The sound I liked but I think you might have wanted to choose a more classic newgrounds audio.

For a beginning flash it's good.

The style of your drawing seemed to stay the same in your flashes.

I'm sure you'll probaly end up deleting this because your going to get really good at flash.

Anyway I'm going to go check out and review your other flashes. :)

Later,

_Notorious.

Score: 6

"Good but not to far above average."

submission: Habitat

date: July 11, 2006

I don't think it appeared to me that you used a very expensive flash player for this because of the sketchy quality.

That I think made it more original and stylish. The graphics honestly were pretty basic and there was no storyline.

The drawings looked interesting though. You might want to work on meshing your colors in with the background that you used, it made it look weird.

I really did like this flash but not a lot. I liked your choice of music. Next time you might want to mesh the colors, make your flash a little longer, and make it a little bit more amusing by making it less boring. Nothing really went on.

I gave your flash a 3/5 because I saw you have talent but you didn't put all your effort into it. I think you might want to practice you frame speed a little too. (Not really a big issue.)

_ Notorious.